I'm having issues with my point of view. Or, more specifically, my points of view. Or perhaps I should say my characters' points of view.
See, I like to get deep inside my characters' heads. I like to show what they're thinking, what memory triggers some action they're currently taking. Sometimes I give the inner voice its own little italicized dialogue to indicate the character is talking to himself, or it's some internal commentary contradicting whatever is happening on the surface, like this.
Ryan, this topic probably isn't that interesting, you probably should write about something else. Probably something having to do with sex. People like to read about sex. Or kittens.
Sometimes my POV character acknowledges the inner voice, and sometimes he ignores the inner voice and just keeps going about what he's doing.
Seriously, Ryan, just hit the "Delete Draft" button. Save yourself and your readers some time.
Sometimes the inner voice is helpful for expressing a conflict, or just rounding out the character. Sometimes I use the inner voice for comedic effect.
Hey Ryan, you should just post this link of a cat wearing a shark costume riding a roomba chasing a baby duck around. It's bound to be more interesting than whatever point you're trying to make.
Sometimes, the inner voice is just a dick.
No, fuck you.
I think you're getting off topic.
OK folks, I'm going to try to finish up this post another day.
Until then, new story coming out tomorrow!
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